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Old 08-08-2013, 11:00 AM
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I would move Paragraph #3 down to the bottom just above the last paragraph... I think by saying "There is no scientific data..." and then immediately asking question after question about the scientific data sounds a little condescending...

To me it sounds better to ask those questions in paragraph 4 and then in summary at the bottom say "There doesn't seem to be any scientific data..."
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