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Originally Posted by Reggoh
I would move Paragraph #3 down to the bottom just above the last paragraph... I think by saying "There is no scientific data..." and then immediately asking question after question about the scientific data sounds a little condescending...
To me it sounds better to ask those questions in paragraph 4 and then in summary at the bottom say "There doesn't seem to be any scientific data..."
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A definite improvement. Thanks.